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Submitted by alesnick on Fri, 03/01/2013 - 9:33pm

In the middle 
In the mud 
Winter stillness is
A canny 
Animating melt
Dozing open

-- Alice Lesnick

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In The Middle

Submitted by jrlewis on Fri, 03/01/2013 - 10:46pm.

This is a lovely little poem.  You use assonance very effectively in the first half of the poem where the soft "i" sound is repeated.  In the second half of the poem, I see two separate uses of assonance.  In lines 5 and 6 there is repetition of the "an" sound.  In the same lines, the long "a" sound is also repeated.  The long "o" sounds in the final line tie together the uncommon combination of the words dozing open.  I'm curious about the transition between the first and second halves of the poem from short vowel sounds to long ones.  Was this intention?

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