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Lullabye
lines and colors of menacing lullaby, a child
trapped inside a wooden sub
my brave painting --
changes.
ribbons cuts and writings.
watchful eyes of a figure at the top
turn to loops, now
magnets.
also small gently pillared dwellings,
mini mausolea maybe
now when the cradle starts to fall
the magnets pull it to
now somebody sings a yellow song
now a swirled one
now a baby bounces
when the wind blows
the artist breathes
-- Alice Lesnick, 2012
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thanks!
I just found these comments on my poem. Fun.
Sound is good "now somebody
Sound is good "now somebody sings a yellow song"
Thanks for joining in the
Thanks for joining in the conversation! Because of your comment, I noticed the internal rhyme in this line- now, yellow. Very good sounds. Are you a writer or just someone with a good ear?
I love the phrases "menacing
I love the phrases "menacing lullaby" and "mini mausolea". And this; baby bounces/wind blows/artist breathes. A lot of conflicting emotion and tension, but i think it resolves at the end when the artist breathes.
yes, that resolution is what
yes, that resolution is what i was going for -- kind of a settling in.
It worked.
It worked.
painting
I would love to see the painting, having read the poem. Is there a photo of it?
Yellow song...what a bright
Yellow song...what a bright imagery.
A Lullabye of a Poem
I think you raise an interesting point here- is poetry an adult lullabye? There are certainly similarities in form and style: repetition, meter, rhyme, etc. Also poetic license, or bending sense to sound and rhythem. They are both recited. Yet poetry also exists in print. So perhaps your piece is a translation of a lullabye into a poem?